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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the amounts of Australians participating in five different leisure activities (film
club
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, martial arts,
amateur
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dramatics
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, table tennis, and musical performances) at a public centre in Melbourne over a 20-year period.
Overall
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, the film
club
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 was the most popular choice over the whole period.
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,
while
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 the
number
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 of participants in the film
club
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 and martial arts stabilised from 2000 to 2020, the
number
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 of those who took part in others changed a lot, with dramatic increases in table tennis and musical performances
club
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 members, and a significant drop in
amateur
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dramatics
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club
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 members. In 2000, the amount of citizens registering in movie clubs was higher than those who joined
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others, by around 1.5 to 4 times. Meanwhile, the
number
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 of those who joined the cinema clubs and Wushu stood at about 65 and roughly 36, respectively, and relatively unchanged until 2020.
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, there were considerable changes in the
number
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 of those who participated in the other three clubs. Despite the lack of changes in the
number
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 of
amateur
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dramatics
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 and table tennis members from 2000 to 2005,
while
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 that in
amateur
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dramatics
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 experienced a large decline, by close to 80%, the amount of those who joined in ping-pong witnessed a dramatic growth by nearly 35 over the rest 15 years.
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, the
number
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 of those who took part in musical performances soared, from 0 in 2005 to just under 20 in 2020.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words club, amateur, dramatics, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable numbers
  • fluctuations
  • overall participation
  • comparison
  • activities
  • social centre
  • Melbourne
  • participants
  • highlight
  • report
  • graph illustrates/demonstrates
  • 20-year period
  • key features
  • main features
  • statistical data
  • variations
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