Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent eleswhere. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Government

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The government

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play a vital role

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in running

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a country

its

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it's

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upto

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them how they utilize their funds

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different areas. But there are some people who believe that spending government funds on arts

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useless they need to spend on other areas so that

public

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the public

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can benefit from it.

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essay will elaborate

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on the

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agree and disagree points in upcoming

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task achievement

Consider providing more specific examples of areas where government funds could be better spent, such as education or healthcare.

coherence and cohesion

Try to improve the overall structure of your essay by using more clear topic sentences and connecting ideas throughout.

grammar

Make sure to carefully review your writing for minor grammatical errors and improve the clarity of your statements.

introduction

You have introduced the topic clearly and stated your intention to discuss both sides of the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

62 words

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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent eleswhere. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many countries, many children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people believe that the government has the responsibility to deal with it. Do you agree or disagree?

More and more people today are spending large amounts of money on their complexions in order to look younger. Why do people want to look younger? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

F. Many people are now opting to provide technology companies with their personal data in exchange for access to software. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?