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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent eleswhere. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Government
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The government
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 play a vital role
to run
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in running
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 a country
its
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it's
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upto
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up
on
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to
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 them how they utilize their funds
on
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in
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 different areas. But there are some people who believe that spending government funds on arts
are
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is
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 useless they need to spend on other areas so that
public
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the public
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 can benefit from it.
This
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 essay will elaborate
the
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on the
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 agree and disagree points in upcoming
paragrahs
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paragraphs
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task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples of areas where government funds could be better spent, such as education or healthcare.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the overall structure of your essay by using more clear topic sentences and connecting ideas throughout.
grammar
Make sure to carefully review your writing for minor grammatical errors and improve the clarity of your statements.
introduction
You have introduced the topic clearly and stated your intention to discuss both sides of the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • tourism
  • boost the economy
  • creativity
  • innovation
  • community well-being
  • social cohesion
  • identity
  • belonging
  • government budget
  • essential services
  • prioritize
  • funding allocation
  • aesthetic value
  • public appreciation
  • economic return
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