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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Scientists create new things
for making
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 our
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life
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 easier and better. Nowadays, we have technologies that help us with making
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This
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this
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will
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 how improvement allows us a lot of opportunities,
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life
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, it will be outstanding
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 if people start developing not only their
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life
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,
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 but
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 other things
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such
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 as plants and animals.
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 with, fresh stuffs provide many potentials like making complex work.
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, we
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 robots that help communities with various tasks. If we do not have
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,
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life
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 will be uncomfortable. We get used to using modern items
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 more results from assignments.
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, some workers
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works
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, teenagers like using diverse websites, in order to
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start getting excellent scores
in
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works
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 and studying, we prefer to
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 that, we have other gadgets that can be useful in our
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life
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. All of these
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 were created by scientists in the past, but we’re still using it in our daily routine.
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,
smartphone
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the smartphone
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 is one of the popular gadgets which solve most problems much gentler than without it.
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, people must
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careful
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for getting
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 results. In conclusion, most humans
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stuffs
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 it not only for
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helping
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 animals and other
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 save their species.

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task achievement
Ensure that all ideas are clearly developed and supported with examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your essay by using transitional phrases more effectively between sentences and ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Correct grammatical errors and improve vocabulary to enhance clarity and precision in your writing.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear stance agreeing with the statement.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the essay, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, is clear and organized.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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