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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Topic 3: the best way to resolve significant environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Environmental issues have been widely discussed recently.
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, no serious solutions were implemented. Some people suggest increasing the cost of fuel. I disagree with
this
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 statement. In my opinion, it is not an effective solution. In
this
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 essay, I will explain why I think there are other ways to save nature rather than
the
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fuel usage. One of the key reasons that cause environmental problems is
plastic
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 use. It is not only harmful
for
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 nature, but
also
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 it has a negative impact on
peopls'
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people'
 and animals' health.
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, using
plastic
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 water research showed that 10% of the living things on Earth are dying every year because of
the
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non decayed
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 materials
such
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 as
plastic
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.
Moreover
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,
this
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 has a negative impact on the soil, causing poor soil quality. Which leads to
producing
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 unhealthy agricultural
food
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.
On the other hand
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, the lack of governmental supervision over agricultural products may increase the production of unhealthy
food
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that
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causing a critical change in the ecosystem.
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, when rabbits eat genetically modified grass, in the long-term, rabbits will die, affecting the lions' survival in nature as rabbits are the main
food
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 for lions. I believe a healthy
foodchain
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food chain
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 is the most important
componant
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component
 to
maintain
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healthy
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 environment. In conclusion, controlling the fuel cost is not the best way to save the environment. Reducing the use of
plastic
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 and non-biodegradable materials and thoughtful governmental supervision over the process of planting and producing
food
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plays
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 a critical role.

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Task Achievement
Your introduction clearly states your position on the topic, but it could be more specific about the reasons you'll discuss.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure your main points are clearly indicated and each paragraph connects logically to the previous one to enhance coherence.
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Provide clearer examples or more detailed explanations to strengthen your arguments and ensure they are relevant to the topic.
Task Achievement
Your essay demonstrates a clear stance against the idea of increasing fuel costs, which is excellent for task response.
Task Achievement
You've identified multiple environmental issues, which showcases a broader understanding of the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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