The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000- 2008 intended to stay in the UK, and the pie chart shows the reasons for migration in 2008. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000- 2008 intended to stay in the UK, and the pie chart shows the reasons for migration in 2008. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000- 2008 intended to stay in the UK, and the pie chart shows the reasons for migration in 2008. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows intended length of stay of immigrants to the
UK
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, between 2000 and 200.
However
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, the bar chart gives data about why they
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to the
UK
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in 2008.
Overall
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,
while
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in the line graph the highest percentage of
people
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stayed in the
UK
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maximum
2
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of 2
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years
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, in the bar chart, most of
individuals
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the individuals
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went to the
UK
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for working
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to work
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. As the graph shows, at the beginning, around 150,000
number of
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people
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stayed in the United Kingdom for 2
years
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in 2000, followed by a significant increase to 250,000 in 2004.Afterwards,
this
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figure experienced fluctuations, and by the
end
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end,
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it remained at 250,000 in 2008.
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,
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people
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the people
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stayed
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who stayed
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in the
UK
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for 4 or more
years
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was
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approximately 148,000
people
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and it experienced
decline
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a decline
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.
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, the number of
people
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who stayed in the
UK
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for four or more
years
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was approximately 148,000 in 2008, and it experienced a decline.By 2003, it had declined to 147,000,
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over the next three
years
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, it fluctuated with an upward trend, reaching about 152,000 in 2006, before consistently decreasing to just over around 147,000
people
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in 2008.From 2000 to 2008, the smallest proportion of
people
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stayed in the
UK
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for between two and four
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, even
it
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though it
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did not grow to just under 100,000. As the chart shows, there were several reasons for migration to the United Kingdom in 2008, but the main reason was for working with 38%.
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, 32% of
individual
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individuals
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went to the
UK
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for studying
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to study
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.In terms of accompanying or joining family, it was only 16%.
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, 7% of
people
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moved for other reasons, or no reason was stated.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, in contrast".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, people, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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