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The maps below show the Malvern Nature School campus in 1999 and development plans for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where

The maps below show the Malvern Nature School campus in 1999 and development plans for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where
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The maps illustrate the Malvern Nature
Shool
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School
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campus
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's changes in the period between 1999 and 2029.
Overall
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, the
campus
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 area will be completely renovated and modernized after the time period. It can be noticed that the development plans
fot
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for
 2029 will
involves
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involve
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,
firstly
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, the relocation and the addition of
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school
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a school
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 building, and
secondly
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, the construction of a new
road
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 and a
second
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car
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park
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. First of all, in 1999 just one
road
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 on the west
side
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 of the map allowed
the
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apply
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access to the only
car
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park
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 and to the main entrance of the
campus
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.
In addition
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, a path divided the area between
schools
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school
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 building 1 and
school
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 building 2.
Furthermore
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,
at the end
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 of the path, on the east
side
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 of the
campus
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, was located
the
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in the
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 sports field. Moving to the development plans for 2029, it is worth mentioning that a
second
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road
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 will be built in the
center
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centre
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 of the
campus
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, dividing
north
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the north
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 and south of the map.
Moreover
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,
this
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 new
road
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 will
brign
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bring
to
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apply
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a
second
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car
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park
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, established
in
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on
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 the north-east
side
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.
On the other hand
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,
an
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a
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 hallway will connect
the
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apply
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school
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building
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 1 and 2,
consequently
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, a portion of the path will be demolished.
To conclude
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, the
sport
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sports
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 field will be relocated
in
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to
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 the south
side
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 of the
second
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car
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park
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, with a third
school
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 building taking its place.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words campus, school, road, second, car, park, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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