Many countries want to host international sports event, while other countries think that hosting sports event has more problems than benefits. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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of the states are interested in presenting cultural programmes but others
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to perform as they believe it can have more consequences than merits. In my opinion, it can contribute various
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excellence
to the territory
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as being famous and
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and
also
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to attract many foreigners.
This
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essay will provide several arguments and
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over both
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points. Initiating
in
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world wide
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worldwide
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festivals and contributing can cause more advantages to the region than disadvantages.
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, it will help to raise the fame and culture of their nation around the world, where people all over the globe
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and view these locations.
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,
this
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will indeed help to incline their
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revenue in tourism, sports and
in
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business.
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, the FIFA World
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in 2022 which was held in
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Saudi Arabia can be a great example
where
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of where
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this
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country flourishes and
have
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been a topic of discussion around the earth for
their
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its
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magnificient
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magnificent
effort and kindness to people from everywhere.
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, they
also
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recieved
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received
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an invitation
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invitation
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invitations
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to join
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other parties and their citizens
had
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obtained more
employement
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employment
and income
due to
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this
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investment.
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, there can be
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negatives too with
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type of start
up
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. Encouraging other communities to their region can cause issues
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as more traffic in cities and roads where the public can get a bit upset.
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, certain cultures and activities of outsiders
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as using alcohol and smoking can influence the youth of the nation.
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, the Olympics held in
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Japan
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over the past year
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made their city more crowded
where
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and
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the society members were unable to lead their normal
life
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lives
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as they were getting late to their
works
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work
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and
to
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schools
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school
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. To add on, the habits of some travellers had
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revoken
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revoked
revoke
the community to give complains to their leaders for certain acts that they cannot resist in their place.
To conclude
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, some states
wants
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to through universal events though others think that it
cause
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more damage. In my
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it can help to elevate their budget and money despite few circumstances like more traffic and unpleasant behaviours of
pilgirms
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pilgrims
.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly presents both viewpoints and states your opinion more explicitly.
coherence and cohesion
Use varied sentence structures to enhance the flow of your essay, and ensure each paragraph is well-organized with clear topic sentences.
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Provide more specific examples or statistics to support your arguments and make them more convincing.
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You have introduced the topic and provided a clear opinion, indicating your stance on the issue.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay contains relevant points about both perspectives, showing an understanding of the topic.
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