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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps provide key information about the maps for industrial
area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
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 in
the
Correct article usage
apply
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Norbiton town between now and plan
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future
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the future
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that planned
future
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 development shows significant changes.
In addition
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, the Norbiton industrial area now shows many
factory
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factories
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whereas
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 planned
future
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 development
well
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will
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destruct
Verb problem
destroy
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 all the factors and build many housing.
According to
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 what is shown, the map for
Norbiton
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the Norbiton
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 industrial area now
show
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shows
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 only
a
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apply
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farm land
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farmland
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 on the right factory and empty lands. In terms of the planned
future
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 development
show
Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
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 significant changes like destruct all the
factory
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factories
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and
Correct word choice
apply
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construct
Wrong verb form
constructing
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 housing, and
also
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build
Wrong verb form
building
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bridge
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a bridge
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accros
Correct your spelling
across
 the river.
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Also
Add a comma
Also,
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 the shops
,
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apply
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 and the medical
center
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centre
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lies
Correct subject-verb agreement
lie
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 beside the shops
on
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in
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 the planned
future
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show
Wrong verb form
showing
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 the new school and playground beside next to them

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words future with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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