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The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast-food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the frequency of consuming fast
food
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 among Americans in 2003, 2006 and 2013.
Overall
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, the majority of US citizens consume fast
food
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 once a week and once or twice a month over the ten-year period,
while
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people
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 who eat fast
food
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 daily make up the
least
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lowest
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 percentage.
To begin
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 with, the frequency at which
people
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 living in the United States of America eat at fast
food
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restaurants
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 varies throughout the years. In 2003, about 31% of US residents ate at fast
food
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restaurants
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 weekly, followed by
people
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 who visited
such
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restaurants
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 once or twice a month at 30%.
In contrast
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, daily consumers of fast
food
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, and those who never ate at fast
food
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restaurants
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 recorded 5% or less throughout the years.
Furthermore
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, consumption at fast
food
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restaurants
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 increased among weekly eaters to about 33% in 2006,
then
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 dropped significantly to approximately 27% in 2013.
However
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, regarding
people
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 who eat once or twice a month at fast
food
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restaurants
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,
this
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 frequency declined to 25% in 2006, before peaking at approximately 33%, being the most frequent time when
people
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 eat at fast
food
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restaurants
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 in 2013.
In contrast
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,
while
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 other frequencies vary among the time of US residents,
people
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 who never ate at fast
food
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restaurants
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 and daily consumers followed a similar trend.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people, restaurants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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