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The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2009 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2009 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
books
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 read by students (
girls
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 and
boys
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) at Starmouth School, between 2006 and 2012.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the graph shows an opposite trend,
girls
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reader
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readers
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 were dominating the chart at the beginning of the period.
However
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,
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boys
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reader
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readers
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 reached a breaking-even point,
then
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 surpassed
girls
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at the end
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 of the period. In 2009, the
number
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 of
books
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 read by
boys
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were
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 at
it
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 lowest approximately 21
books
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, followed
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by an
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an
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graduall
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gradual
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 increase in
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figures
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 and reached 40
books
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 in 2010. In
contract
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, the
number
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 of
books
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 read by
boys
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 and
girls
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were
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was
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 the same
by
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with
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 100
books
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 in 2011,
then
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 the
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boys
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boy's
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 figures surpassed
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girls
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girls'
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reader
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readers
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 reaching 140
books
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 per year by 2012. In terms of
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
books
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 read by
girls
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, they were reading nearly 60
books
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 by 2009,
then
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 the figures began to
increasing
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 significantly to 100
books
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 per year in 2011, after which faced a fall to 80
books
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 were read by 2012.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books, girls, boys with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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