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some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework everday in order to be successful at school. discuss both sides and give your opinion

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 growing debate
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wheather
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whether
 teachers should give home-assignment to students which will improve their academic
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progress
.
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, some people contradict that institutes must not assign extra work as it consumes the time for
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extracurricular
 activities. I believe
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schools
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 must provide reasonable homework to children in order to perform
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better
 in their exams. On one side, education plays a crucial role in
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life
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 and for achieving high grades in
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examinations
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self-
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study
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self-study
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ia
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is
 a highly efficient learning method. In a recent study, it was
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 that educational institutions which give mandatory additional study
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greater
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 annual percentage of students as compared to
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institutions
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 that do not assign
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home tasks
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, revising the unit at home which was taught
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classroom
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the classroom
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 helps to memorize topics more effectively. on the other side, apart from learning there are some essential
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activities
 for child development
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 as physical activity and hobbies. If teenagers
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 given extra
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 after-school work it can be a burden on them. As a
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result
, they would not be able to focus on
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 which can
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 to depression and isolation.
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, they may get bored by repeatedly doing
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 thing to avoid
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, children may get more practical homework that they find more interesting.
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consequences
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, lack of mental development can occur
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 excessive revision. Children must have specific time
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periods
period
 for their
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extracurricular
 activities which can help in personal development.
To conclude
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, no doubt assigning
hometasks
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home tasks
 is part and parcel of academies even so tutors should keep in mind that youngsters have to participate in other tasks too which are imperative for their
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 growth.
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, moderate
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assignment
assignments
 can help out students to pass their tests with flying
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language
Ensure correct spelling and grammar usage throughout the essay, such as 'There has been' instead of 'Their has being' and 'better' instead of 'bettter'. These small errors can detract from the overall clarity of your argument.
structure
Provide clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to enhance logical flow and coherence. This will guide the reader more explicitly through your arguments.
evidence
Incorporate more specific examples to support your points. For instance, citing particular studies or statistics that reinforce your claims will make your arguments more compelling.
content
You presented a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument, which is essential for this type of essay.
structure
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your stance, reinforcing your opinion on the necessity of homework for children's academic success.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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