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The graph below shows the information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030

The graph below shows the information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030
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The line graph illustrates the data from 2008 statistics about
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consumption
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the consumption
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 of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
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, it can be noted that in the period of 50
years
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years,
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 the energy usage of Petrol and Oil has remained significantly ahead compared to various fuel options
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 as coal, Natural gas, Nuclear, Solar/Wind and Hydropower. In 1980 the average
consumption
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 of Petrol and Oil in the USA was 35
quadrillion
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units
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while
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 the average amount of usage of nuclear, Solar/Wind and Hydropower was
near
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 5
quadrillion
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units
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 only.
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, the biggest increase was observed in the
50 year
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50-year
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 period between petrol and oil where the number of
consumption
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 ranged from 35
quadrillion
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units
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 to 50
quadrillion
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units
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 and
also
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 between coal where
this
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 number of usage changed from 15
quadrillion
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units
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 to 30
quadrillion
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units
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. Meanwhile,
consumption
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 of other fuels has remained more or less unchanged.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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