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Band 5.5

You rented a car from Car Rental Company. The air conditioner has stopped working. You phoned the company a week ago but it still has not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: - introduce yourself; - explain the situation; - say what action you would like the company to take.

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Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why I am writing
this
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 letter to you is that I would like to explain the situation which happened with the
car
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to rent
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your
Car
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 Rental
company
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. My name is Nafisa Abdurahimova, a first-year student at America University. I live a Wakizi
street
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Street
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, America. The distance is far more long between my house and the university . my house
located
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is located
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 50 km distance
to
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from
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 my university and I
have
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am
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 not enabled to use public transport.
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 why I decided to rent a
car
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 to your
company
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 two weeks ago.
However
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, the
car
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 which I rent your
Car
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 Rental
company
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 was damaged. The air conditioner has stopped working. I subtitled the
company
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 a week ago,
however
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 it still has not been repaired. I would like you to fix the air conditioner of my
car
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 as soon as
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due
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possible due
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 to the hot weather . I hope you will respond to my letter as soon as possible and take
necessary
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the necessary
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 action. Yours faithfully, Nafisa

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task achievement
Consider starting with a brief introduction of the purpose of your letter to enhance clarity. Mention directly the issue with the air conditioning at the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use proper prepositions and phrasing, such as 'rented a car from your company' instead of 'rent your Car Rental company'.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your thoughts so each paragraph focuses clearly on one main idea. For instance, one paragraph could detail your travel situation, and another could discuss the issue with the car.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter features a clear structure with an introduction, explanation, and a request, which is helpful for the reader.
task achievement
You maintained a polite and formal tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for a letter of this nature.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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