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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph displays
equipment's
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the equipment's
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 number which
were
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was
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 transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002, there are compares four different
types
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 of transport in the graph. 
Overall
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, in the potential line graph, there are not any
dramatically
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dramatic
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 changes.
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However
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However,
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 throughout 18
years
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years,
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 all
types
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 of transports have kept their relevance.  To start with the first
year
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, when
the
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apply
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road
transportation
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 showed
majority
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the majority
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 number of goods.
This
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year
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 the pipeline users demonstrated minority tones. The
last
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 two
types
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 of
transportation
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 had approximately the same amount of goods, that contained about 40 tonnes.
Nevertheless
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, after 8 years all
types
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 of
transports
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transport
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 usage had significantly increased and decreased. The Railway
transportation
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 demolished for 10 quantities,
whereas
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 the water transport's use improved for 20.
The
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apply
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Road
delivering
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delivery
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begun
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began
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 taking off
in
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apply
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this
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year
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. The pipeline transporting was increased noticeably.  In the
last
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year
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, all of
transports
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transport
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 had highly progress except the rail
transportation
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, than they showed 18 years ago. The railway system displayed the same result as it had displayed in 1974.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words types, year, transportation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overview
  • Trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stability
  • Mode of transport
  • Quantity
  • Comparison
  • Goods
  • Transported
  • Significant
  • Noticeable
  • General trend
  • Time span
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