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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

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The graph presents the data on the quantities of goods shipped in the UK from 1974 to 2002 by four distinct modes of
transportation
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. Units are measured in
Million
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tonnes
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.
Overall
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, the
transportation
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 of goods through Road surpassed all other modes of
transportation
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through out
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throughout
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 1974 to 2002.
However
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, Pipeline
transport
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 was at lowest among all
transport
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 systems.
Whereas
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Water
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 and
Rail
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Transport
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 are
same
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the same
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 at
beginning
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the beginning
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 by the end,
Water
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transport
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 has
siginificant
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significant
 growth compared to
Rail
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. In terms of
transportation
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 in the UK, Road has always stayed at
top
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the top
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. It
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had
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slightest
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 fluctuations from the year 1975 to around 1995,
therafter
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thereafter
, it
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had
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 significant growth with nearly 100
Million
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tonnes
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.
In contrast
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, Pipeline has always been low in
comparision
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comparison
 with others.From 1975 to around 1983 it
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had
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 a gradual improvement,but, around 1983 to 2000 it
is
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was
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 relatively stable with around 20
Million
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tonnes
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.
However
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,
Water
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 and
Rail
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 started at the same point
that is
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 40
Million
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tonnes
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.
Although
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 they started at the same
Water
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transportation
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 experienced a significant surge around 1980 and continued till 2000. Meanwhile,
Rail
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transport
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 showed a significant decrease from about 1980, with high fluctuations and
sharpest
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the sharpest
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 incline
at
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in
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 2000.
As a result
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, it continued
the
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at the
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 same
tonnes
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 as the beginning (
that is
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 40
Million
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tonnes
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 respectively).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, million, tonnes, transport, water, rail with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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