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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph presents the data on the quantities of goods shipped in the UK from 1974 to 2002 by four distinct modes of
transportation
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. Units are measured in
Million
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tonnes
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.
Overall
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, the
transportation
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 of goods through Road surpassed all other modes of
transportation
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through out
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throughout
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 1974 to 2002.
However
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, Pipeline
transport
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 was at lowest among all
transport
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 systems.
Whereas
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Water
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 and
Rail
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Transport
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 are
same
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 at
beginning
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the beginning
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 by the end,
Water
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transport
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 has
siginificant
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significant
 growth compared to
Rail
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. In terms of
transportation
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 in the UK, Road has always stayed at
top
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. It
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had
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slightest
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 fluctuations from the year 1975 to around 1995,
therafter
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thereafter
, it
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had
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 significant growth with nearly 100
Million
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tonnes
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.
In contrast
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, Pipeline has always been low in
comparision
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comparison
 with others.From 1975 to around 1983 it
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had
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 a gradual improvement,but, around 1983 to 2000 it
is
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was
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 relatively stable with around 20
Million
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tonnes
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.
However
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,
Water
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 and
Rail
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 started at the same point
that is
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 40
Million
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tonnes
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.
Although
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 they started at the same
Water
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transportation
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 experienced a significant surge around 1980 and continued till 2000. Meanwhile,
Rail
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transport
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 showed a significant decrease from about 1980, with high fluctuations and
sharpest
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 incline
at
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in
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 2000.
As a result
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, it continued
the
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at the
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 same
tonnes
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 as the beginning (
that is
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 40
Million
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tonnes
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 respectively).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, million, tonnes, transport, water, rail with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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