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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the comparison of ways of accessing the latest
news
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 in two countries,
Canada
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 and
Australia
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.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that more than half
citizens
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of citizens
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 in
Canada
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 used TV to update their
news
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,
while
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 in
Australia
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 the largest portion was from online media. A small fraction from
Canada
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 was not specified.
In addition
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,
the
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a
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 minority portion
from
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of
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Australia
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were
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 from print and radio. Turning to pie chart one, a significant percentage showed that 40% of people in
Canada
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 used to watch
news
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 on Television.
Then
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, followed by online platforms,
whoch
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which
 showed 36%, print only 14%,
radio
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and radio
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 7%.
While
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 The minority segment of users was not specified only 3%.
In contrast
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, the majority of citizens from
Australia
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 mostly read the
news
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 from online platforms, at 52%.
However
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, the
television
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number of television
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 users in
Australia
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just
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is just
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 below those in Canadian, about 37%. The people interested in print media approximately 7%,and the portion of using radio was the same as the users of
non
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who were
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specified
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non-specified
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, by 2%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words news, canada, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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