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One of your friends recently had a birthday celebration, but you missed it and you forgot to tell your friend that you couldn't attend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: apologize for missing the birthday celebration; explain why you missed it and why you didn't tell your friend; and say what you would like to do to show that you are sorry.

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Dear John, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you about missing
the
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your
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birthday
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 celebration
of
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yours
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as well as
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 I want to explain the reason why I missed it. I am terribly sorry to miss the most important event that was your
birthday
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 celebration. I
have
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had
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 never thought
about
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that I
was
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would
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 not able to attend the
birthday
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 party.
However
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, because of some unforeseen
situations
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 I had to miss it. To explain the reason for not going to the party, on that day my grandmother was seriously ill and we had to take her to the hospital. There, the doctors said that her illness was untreatable, so we should take her to India to find a cure.
Therefore
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, I had no time to call you and inform
about
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you about
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 it. To show my sorrow, I will invite you to the restaurant which is our
favorite
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favourite
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 one. If you come to the restaurant, I will congratulate
on
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you on
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 your
birthday
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 with lots of presents and we will enjoy our time. I hope you will not
upset
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be upset
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 with me for missing your
birthday
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 celebration and you will accept my suggestion. I look forward to meeting with you. Best wishes, Soxibjon

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to keep a clear and logical structure throughout the letter. Segregate each point into distinct paragraphs for better readability.
task response
Consider adding a more personal touch to your apology, perhaps by expressing how much your friend's celebration meant to you.
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The letter conveys a sincere apology and explains the reasons for your absence well.
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The phrase 'I will invite you to the restaurant which is our favorite one' is a nice gesture that emphasizes your care for your friend's feelings.
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