In many countries recently young single people have been living far from their parents,from the time they began studies or work and until they are married.Do you think there are more advantages or disadvantages to this trend?

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Nowadays, many young single adults are living far away from their families, after they join
univeristies
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universities
or the workforce until they get married. I think it is beneficial for the youth to live
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independently
from their parents before they get married
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because it will help them to gain life
expereiance
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experience
and mature faster, which
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them prepared for marriage's
responsiblity
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responsibility
in the future. In
this
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matter in detail.
To begin
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with, adult children need to be
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separated
from their parents after they
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graduate
from high
schools
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so they can learn
life-skills
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by
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their own.
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, I learned
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pay my bills and take care of
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myself
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after I studied
in
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a university abroad.
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, I became a responsible individual and have more
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of
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myself.
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,
generally
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young adults gain
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life experience
through their single years.
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, their knowledge would be useful when they get married and have children.
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, before my father
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married, he
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around the world
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and
had
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learned new languages.
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that, he teaches me and my
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to be
indepened
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independent
and responsible
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a young age. In conclusion, the
speration
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separation
operation
of single adults from their
familes
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families
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gives
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them the opportunity for growth and
independecy
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independence
independency
they need to
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grown individuals, which will be
essintial
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essential
when they create their own families . I firmly believe that young individuals need to be apart from their parents after a certain age , so they can grow and mature by themselves.

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General
Check for spelling mistakes (e.g., 'indepently' should be 'independently', 'expereiance' should be 'experience'). These small errors can detract from your overall impression.
Content
Make sure your arguments are fully developed. For example, you state that young adults gain life experience. Expand on how this specifically prepares them for marriage.
Content
Ensure that your examples are directly related to the points you are making. While personal examples are good, clarify how they support your arguments more explicitly.
Strength
Your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic, which is a strong start.
Strength
You provide personal examples that add a personal touch to your argument, making it relatable.
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