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The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.

The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.
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The rod diagram above illustrates the time spent over the phone via local
lines
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, domestic and overseas fixed
lines
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, and mobile phones in the UK.
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, it seems
while
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 local telephone calls spiked in 1999 and
then
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 fell in the statistics, the national and international fixed line and mobile calls rose.
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 the schematic, most people were busy over the local
lines
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 in the year 1999 with approximately 90
million
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minutes
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 behind the local
lines
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, leading the total time by more than 30
million
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minutes
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 margin over the domestic and abroad line.
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,
after
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its record declined to a little more than 70
million
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minutes
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 in the year 2002. Regarding the two other competitors, mobile phones and more distant calls increased dramatically with long-distance calls rising from less than 40
million
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minutes
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 to a bit more than 60
million
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minutes
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 from 1995 to 2002.
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, mobile telephones had a rapid rise between 1995 and 2002. turning the duration of talks from less than 5
million
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minutes
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 to approximately 40.5
million
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minutes
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.

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