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Writing Samples
Band 3

Your recently bought an electric gadget for your home. Your friend wants the same gadjet and needs your advice. In this letter you should include : what the gadjet is what think about it advice about other alternatives your friend could buy

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Dear Nazanin I am writing
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 letter to you to inform you about a situation that happened with
purchase
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 of an electric gadget. I hope you are doing . Well recently bought a robot vacuum cleaner, and I must say it has made my life much easier . It automatically cleans the floor, saving a lot of time and effort. The model I purchased is the superior quality, which
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 strong suction power and can be controlled via a mobile app. I highly recommend
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 gadget if you have a busy schedule like me.
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, if you are looking for other alternatives, you might consider a cordless handheld vacuum for quick cleaning or a smart mop for better floor maintenance. Let me know if you need more details. Best wishes, Feruza

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grammar
Ensure proper sentence structure and grammar for better clarity. For example, 'I hope you are doing well' and 'I recently bought' instead of 'I hope you are doing . Well recently bought'.
content
Provide a slightly more detailed description of the robot vacuum cleaner's features to strengthen your recommendation.
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Try to elaborate a bit more on the alternatives. For instance, mention specific brands or features that might be beneficial to your friend.
style
The letter has a friendly tone and maintains a personal touch, which is great for communication between friends.
content
You successfully included the main points required by the prompt, such as the gadget description and alternative options.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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