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The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000
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The bar chart illustrates the
percentage
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 of employed men and women aged 60-64 in
Japan
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,
Belgium
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,
Australia
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 and the
USA
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, in the years 1970 and 2000. Over these three decades, the
percentage
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 of aged employees had declined.
Furthermore
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,
Belgium
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 had the greatest reduction
while
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Japan
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 had a small decline. In 1970,
Japan
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 had the highest
employment
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percentage
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 for people aged 60-64 at 84% and it had dropped to 76% by 2000.
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, after three decades they still had the highest
employment
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percentage
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.
Belgium
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,
on the other hand
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 in 1970 had 79%
employment
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 for these people and by 2000 they had the least at 19% of all four countries.
Australia
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 and the
USA
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 had a modest decline, with
Australia
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 and the
USA
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 being at 74% and 73% in 1970 respectively. By 2000, the
USA
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 had dropped to 55% and
Australia
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 had dropped to 47%.
To conclude
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, In 1970,
Japan
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 had the highest
employment
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 at 84%, closely followed by
Belgium
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 at 79%,
then
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Australia
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 at 74% and at
last
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 the
USA
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 at 73%. By 2000,
Japan
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 still held the tag at 76%, followed by the
USA
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 at 55%,
then
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Australia
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 at 47% and at
last
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 Beigium at 19%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, japan, belgium, australia, usa, employment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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