While some people think that art is an important subject for children to study, others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In recent years, a debate has emerged on whether art is an essential subject for children or if it is a waste of time. Advocates of studying art claim that it plays a crucial role in fostering creativity and reducing stress

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their opponents believe that focusing deeply on core subjects is vital for future job opportunities and economic stability.

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essay will discuss both views and provide a personal perspective.

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Consider adding more specific examples to support your points about the benefits of art and the argument against it.

coherence and cohesion

Make sure to clearly separate the two sides of the argument in distinct paragraphs to improve the logical flow of your essay.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure that your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and clearly states your personal opinion.

task achievement

The introduction clearly outlines the topic of debate and presents both sides effectively, setting up the reader's expectations for the essay.

coherence and cohesion

Your vocabulary is varied and appropriate for the topic, demonstrating a good command of the language.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

70 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

foster
creativity
imagination
express
non-verbal
innovative thinking
academic performance
spatial awareness
critical thinking
emotional benefits
stress
anxiety
core subjects
resources
job opportunities
economic stability
measurable skills
standardized testing
real-world challenges

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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