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“The maps below show the layout of a school in 1985 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.”

“The maps below show the layout of a school in 1985 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.”
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These two maps illustrate different layouts of
Use synonyms
school
Fix the agreement mistake
schools
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 in 1985 and a new update in
a
Correct article usage
the
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 present
school
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from
maps
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the maps
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 that several
transformation
Change to a plural noun
transformations
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that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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have been made to the current
school
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. The
school
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 in 1995,
a
Correct article usage
the
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 number of students was 1500. There was a
car
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park
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 in the
center
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centre
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 of the
school
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 and a small office opposite
this
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car
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park
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.
In addition
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, in the West corner of the
school
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 a big library.
Furthermore
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 ,two classrooms in front of playing fields
..
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.
...
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Also
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, there was a
car
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park
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 behind the classroom.
On the other
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hand
Add a comma
hand,
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 there are
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
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significant changes
occurred
Wrong verb form
occurring
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 in the
school
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 at
present
Add an article
the present
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 day.
Firstly
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, the government
add
Wrong verb form
added
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 a new learning resources
center
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centre
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instead
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 of
library
Add an article
the library
a library
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 which was beside
of
Change preposition
apply
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the
school
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.
Also
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, they demolished the library which was beside the office and they
build
Wrong verb form
built
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 additional
classroom
Fix the agreement mistake
classrooms
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.
Furthermore
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, they construct one ball and one fitness
center
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centre
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 behind the playfields.
However
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, the
car
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park
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 location is still in the same place.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, furthermore".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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