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The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004.

The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004.
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 the amounts of daily
oil
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 produced by four different African countries, including
Nigeria
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, Chad,
Congo
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, and
Somalia
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, during a five-year period.
Overall
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, from 2000 to 2002,
while
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Nigeria
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 and
Congo
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 were significantly more productive than
Somalia
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 every day, the amounts of
oil
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 produced by both
Nigeria
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 and
Congo
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 experienced a slight drop.
By contrast
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,
Somalia
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's
oil
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-producing volume dramatically grew in
this
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 period.
In addition
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, from 2003 to 2004, Chad began to produce patrol and saw a soar in producing volume.
Also
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, that in
Somalia
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 continued to rise,
while
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 both
Nigeria
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 and
Congo
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 witnessed an opposite situation. In 2000, the daily
oil
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 production in
Nigeria
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 and
Congo
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 stood at 205000 and 275000, respectively, which were significantly higher than
Somalia
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's (5000). During the following 3-year period,
Nigeria
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 and
Congo
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's patrol exportation declined by 15000 and 53000, respectively, but that in
Somalia
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 almost tripled, from 5000 in 2000 to 17000 in 2002. In 2003,
Congo
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 started producing
oil
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 and soared from 8000 in 2003 to 50000 in 2004.
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,
Somalia
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's
oil
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 production rocketed by more than two times at the same time.
However
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, the amounts of daily
oil
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 produced by
Nigeria
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 and
Congo
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 dipped to a low point at 213000 and 203000, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, nigeria, congo, somalia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "soar" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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