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The bar chart below shows the ntop ten countries for the production and consumotion of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the ntop ten countries for the production and consumotion of electricity in 2014.
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The chart given depicts information about the production and consumption of
electricity
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 in the top 10 countries in 2014.
Overall
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, it can be seen that China was the biggest country in
electricity
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,
while
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 Korea, Rep. had the lowest rate in the period given. The production was 5, 398 (
billion
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kWh
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) and the consumption was 5,322 (
billion
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kWh
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) in China. The second highest production was in the United States, accounting for 4,099 (
billion
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kWh
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), and
electricity
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 was used 3,866 (
billion
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kWh
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) in the US. Russia produced and consumed more
electricity
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 than the other 7 countries, 1,057 and 1,038 (
billion
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kWh
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) respectively. Japan was in fourth place for consumption (936.2
billion
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kWh
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) and usage (856.7
billion
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kWh
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) . Germany was merely a country that produced
electricity
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 less than using it, 526.6 and 582.5
billion
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kWh
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 respectively. In Korea, Rep. the electric energy was least by using 449.5
billion
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kWh
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 and producing 485.1 in 2014.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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