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Band 2.5

The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The given layout illustrates the information about changes in
ground
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the ground
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 floor that
had
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were
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 done in the years
of
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apply
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2001 and 2009.
Body paragraph 1
The most
noticeble
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noticeable
features
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feature
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in
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on
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 the map
are
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is
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,
the
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that the
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 size of
self-help
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the self-help
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 desk has drastically
dereased
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decreased
deceased
.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 the place
has
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was
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 distributed to two sections named History and Fiction in 2009.In a similar way,
History
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the History
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 part is
also
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 replaced by Kitchen, Economics and Law.
Whereas
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 the history block has settled
leftside
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left side
left-side
 corner of the building.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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,
Newspaper
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Newspapers
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 and periodicals
element has
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have been
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 swapped
by
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for
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 Films and
DVD's
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DVDs
DVD
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.
Tables
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The table
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 design has
improvised
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been improvised
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to
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into
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 two horizontal seatings from four different individual tables which
is
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are
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 located in
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the center
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center
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centre
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 of the building.
Addition
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In addition
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 to
this
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,
Children's
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the Children's
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 area and
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the Computers
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Computers
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Computer
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 areas are newly launched in
updated
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the updated
an updated
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 map where there is no
exsistance
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existence
 in
previous
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the previous
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.
Conclusion
Overall
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, Fiction
place
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Place
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 has re-established
to
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apply
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Tables with more space than before. In the whole map,
Librarian's
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the Librarian's
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 desk and stairs
remains
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remain
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 the same in the two years.
However
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, the entrance is
also
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 the same.

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language
Work on spelling errors and grammar for better clarity. For example, 'noticeble' should be 'noticeable,' and 'dereased' should be 'decreased.'
coherence
Ensure that your comparisons are clear and consistently structured. For instance, you could clearly show how specific areas were transformed between the two years.
task achievement
Including more specific details about the differences in space or facilities could enhance the quality of your response.
task achievement
You've identified and discussed some of the main changes between the two layouts, which is a good start.
coherence
Your essay contains a clear overview and some structured paragraphs, which aid the reader's understanding.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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