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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some argue that
professionals
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 like doctors and engineers should be obligated to serve in the country where they received their
education
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,
while
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 others claim that individuals should have the
freedom
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 to work wherever they choose. Both perspectives have valid arguments, on
one
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hand
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 governments invest a huge amount of money in society's
education
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 and it is logical
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that
 they want to benefit from
professionals
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,
on the other
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 it contradicts personal
freedom
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 and human rights.  Supporters of the mandatory service believe that
professionals
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 owe a debt to the country that provided their training, especially if it was subsidized by the government.
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, medical
education
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 is often heavily funded by taxpayers, and requiring graduates to serve locally can help address shortages in rural or underserved areas.
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, in many European
countries
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 governments provide their citizens with free higher
education
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. Retaining trained
professionals
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 can contribute to national development, strengthen public services, and prevent the phenomenon known as “brain drain". At the same time , many people believe that forcing
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 to stay in one country contradicts basic principles of personal
freedom
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 and career growth. Modern
professionals
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 may seek better working conditions, salaries, or research opportunities that are not available in their home countries.
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, international mobility can foster global knowledge exchange.
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, a doctor trained in Azerbaijan who works in Germany might gain valuable experience and later return to contribute even more meaningfully to their original community. In conclusion,
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 countries have a right to benefit from the
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 whom they train, compulsory service may not be the most effective or ethical approach. Individuals should
keep
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 the
freedom
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 to decide where to live and work, but governments can take practical steps to make staying an attractive option.

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task achievement
Consider providing more detailed examples in your body paragraphs to enhance the depth of your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to carefully proofread your work for small grammatical errors, such as 'thay' instead of 'that'. These small mistakes can distract from your overall message.
coherence and cohesion
Work on creating smoother transitions between ideas to improve the flow of your essay.
task achievement
You presented a balanced view of both sides of the argument, which is commendable.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is well-structured, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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