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Band 4

You have had a problem with your next-door neighbor. You have not been able to speak about this problem to your next-door neighbor.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to say about a problem that I faced during 2
weaks
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weeks
 living there
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due to
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apply
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I am not able to say when I met you in
elevator
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the elevator
an elevator
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 and I do not want to disturb you by coming to your home.
Firstly
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, I moved to
this
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 apartment two weeks ago. The flat number is 25/13 which is next
yours
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to yours
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. I live there with my husband and we have a little daughter
as well
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as
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apply
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she
is
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often
sleep
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sleeps
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 at around eight at night.
Thus
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, the first thing I would like to draw your attention to is
noise
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the noise
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 that you provide by listening to music frequently at night by column which is extremely loud.
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, my daughter could not sleep well
as well as
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 she feels
annoyance
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annoyed
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 and cray quite often.
In addition
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 to
this
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, your children usually fling the rubbish in our entrance, I
sow
Verb problem
see
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this
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 from the camera which is located inside
the
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our door.
Furthermore
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 break down the plants, which stay next entrance. I think that you will understand me and my
felling
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feeling
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 pertaining to
this
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situations
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situation
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. To resolve the problem I would appreciate it if you could not turn on the music
such
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 loud after six or seven o’clock
as well as
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 say
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to your’s
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your’s
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your
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 children
that is
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 not normally what they do and it is able to make
neighbors
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neighbours
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 angry. I hope you will take the best solutions in
this
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cases
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case
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. I look forward
from
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to
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 hearing
to
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from
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as
Correct pronoun usage
you as
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 soon as possible.
Correct the word
Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Susana

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer and more logical organization in your letter. Ensure that your introduction states the purpose clearly, followed by the main problem and solutions in separate paragraphs.
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Use a more formal tone and avoid colloquial language. For example, replace 'sow this' with 'saw this' and 'yours' with 'your'.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific times when the noise was particularly disruptive.
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You have effectively communicated the main problems you are facing with your neighbor.
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Your letter maintains a polite tone, which is appropriate for this type of communication.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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