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The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 table shows the proportion of
the
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apply
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smokers
intend
Correct pronoun usage
who intend
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 to give up
with
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for
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 their reasons.
It is clear that
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 most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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smokers
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want
eant
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want
 to quit smoking and the top reason for
that is
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 because better for health in general by
total
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a total
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71
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of 71
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 during
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multiple
multiable
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a multiable
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 period of time, some of them try to start after 6
month
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months
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 which is the sink of the table
then
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 next year by 21 total

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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