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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011t. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (Line graph)

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011t. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (Line graph)
The graph gives information about the
nimber
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number
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 of
the
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apply
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enquiries
which
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apply
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received
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were received
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 by the tourist information office
in
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particular
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a particular
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 city over six
month
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months
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 in 2011.
Overall
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,the rates of the enquiries which received by email showed a steady
decreased
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decrease
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 over the period .
However
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,the enquiries that
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were recivied
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recivied
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received
 by telephone or in person both showed
an
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a
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 gradually increasing
ternd
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trend
.In the
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beginning
beginnig
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beginnig,
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 the blue line was
in
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at
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 the lowest point but it
exceedinf
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exceeded
 the other until it
reched
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reached
 the highest point in the end. In Jan

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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