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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011t. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (Line graph)

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011t. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (Line graph)
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The graph gives information about the
nimber
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number

The word nimber doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 of
the
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apply

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enquiries
which
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apply

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received
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were received

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 by the tourist information office
in
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particular
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a particular

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 city over six
month
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months

The singular noun month follows a number other than one. Consider changing the noun to the plural form.

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 in 2011.
Overall
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,the rates of the enquiries which received by email showed a steady
decreased
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decrease

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 over the period .
However
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,the enquiries that
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were recivied
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were recivied

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recivied
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received
 by telephone or in person both showed
an
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a

The article an may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word gradually.

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 gradually increasing
ternd
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trend

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.In the
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beginning
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beginning

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beginnig
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beginnig,
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 the blue line was
in
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at

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 the lowest point but it
exceedinf
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exceeded

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the other until it
reched
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reached

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the highest point in the end. In Jan

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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