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The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given information is in the percentage form and
have
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 two table charts containing data about people trying to
quite
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quit
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smkoing
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smoking
 and when.
Overall
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, reasons are quite
relevent
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relevant
 for giving up majority are doing it
form
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from
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health
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a health
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 perspective with
that
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apply
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the total number of cigarettes used by a person in a day including in 4
catagories
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categories
 20+, 10-19, fewer than 10, and total.
Firstly
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, there are numerous reasons but mainly
is
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for health
reason
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reasons
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 with 64% of people
drink
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drinking
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 {20+}
cigerattes
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cigarettes
 in a day where numbers
are
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increase with
less
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fewer
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cigerattes
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cigarettes
 in
day
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the day
a day
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 but
total
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the total
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 is 71%.
whereas
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secondly
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, there are other relevant reasons as well
such
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 as less risk of getting smoking-related, present health problems, financial considerations and family pressure with 25%, 12%, 31%, and 16%
accordingly
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.
Lastly
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, when to
quite
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quit
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 is divided
in
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into
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 3 parts next month,
withing
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within
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 6 months,
within
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and within
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 the next year majority of them
are
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apply
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think
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to
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of
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giveup
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give up
 within 6 months 35% of people. Total
intend
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intends
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 to
giveup
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give up
 is 71% in
contras
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contrast
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 not intend to give up
are
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is
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 29%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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