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The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart represents the perception of people in London about the city in three years. In the big picture, it is conspicuous that the highest number of people thinking about
city
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the city
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 was the range of shops. Focusing on the top three categories, the range of shops had stayed at the first position during the observed time even though it had a fractional decrease at around 5% in the second
year
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, before recovering in
year
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 3.
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this
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 position, most citizens
also
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 thought job opportunities
representing
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 London between 35% and 38%.
In contrast
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, the mixture of people, as the third stage, remained stable from
year
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 1 to
year
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 3 with a few
decline
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declines
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 in the
last
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 period. Turning
the
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 rest of the categories, in
year
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 1, museums and art galleries had an upward tendency, starting at just above 20%, growing gradually in the years after, and touching a peak at 26%.
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, both of
night life
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nightlife
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 and transport had a
fluctuative
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fluctuating
 trend in three years at 20% -25%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • survey
  • favorable opinion
  • neutral opinion
  • unfavorable opinion
  • trend
  • public sentiment
  • perception
  • peaks and dips
  • increase
  • decline
  • indifferent
  • gradual decrease
  • sentiment analysis
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