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The graph below shows how much waste is collected and recycled in the US.

The graph below shows how much waste is collected and recycled in the US.
The graph demonstrates how much rubbish was collected and recovered between 1960
to
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and
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 2005 in the
Unitated
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United
 States. As can be seen, the total
waste
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 recycling rose to over 80 million in 2005,
also
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 the percentage of repossession reached a peak %
40
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of 40
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 in the same year. We can see clearly the amount of
waste
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recovery
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 was increasing steadily,
while
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 the percentage of recycling
was rising
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rose
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 from %30
to
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apply
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%
40
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to 40
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, between 1995 and 2005. The total trash
recovery
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 grew rapidly from almost 20 to over 60 million tons between 1990 and 1995. In
the
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this
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 period, the percentage of recycling
was
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apply
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decreased from %40
to
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apply
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%
30
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to 30
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. The total
waste
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 improvement was at %10 percent and the total
waste
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recovery
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 at
nearby
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nearly
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 15 million tons,
when
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while
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 the recycling was %20 in 1960 and these
number
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numbers
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 remained the same until 1970. In conclusion, the amount of garbage
recovery
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was
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apply
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increased every decade except between 1960 and 1970.
However
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, the recycling
percent was
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percentage
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fluctuating
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fluctuated
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 after 1970.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, recovery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • amount
  • notable
  • increase
  • decrease
  • analyze
  • emphasize
  • stagnated
  • compare
  • contrast
  • relationship
  • apparent
  • variables
  • overview
  • highlight
  • efforts
  • insights
  • implications
  • observed
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