The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts depict the generation of
electricity
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in
Germany
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and
France
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from different sources (Conventional thermal, Nuclear, Renewables) and various renewable sources (Biomass, Hydroelectric, Wind, Solar) in 2009.
Overall
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,
electricity
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generation in
France
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was mainly nuclear,
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however
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however,
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Germany
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used
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the highly
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highly
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thermal convention to produce
electricity
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.
Additionally
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, hydroelectric made up the highest proportion of renewables in
France
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and winds in
Germany
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.
Germany
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produced 59.6% of
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electricity
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its electricity
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from conventional thermal in 2009.
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, 76% of
electricity
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was
nuclear generated
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in
France
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. Both countries shared
approximatly
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approximately
the same percentage of renewable energy with 13.7% for
France
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and 17.4% for
Germany
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.
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, the percentage of renewable hydroelectrics was the highest in
France
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(80.5%).
In contrast
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,
Germany
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used biomass as their first source of renewables with 39.3%. Wind came
second,
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after biomass, accounting for 36.9% and 10.5%, in
France
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and
Germany
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, respectively. Solar energy was under 10% in both countries and geothermal energy was zero.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, germany, france with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • generation
  • renewable sources
  • non-renewable sources
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • output levels
  • break down
  • hydroelectric
  • biomass
  • reliance
  • significant differences
  • unexpected findings
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