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Band 2.5

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays ,
Famelyes
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families
 and
indivisualls
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individuals
 relocate to the big
cities
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 rather than staying at
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the counteryside
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counteryside
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countryside
.
However
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Useually
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usually
people
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 looking for the best
oppourtinity
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opportunity
due to
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acheav
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achieve
 a good
live
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life
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 and
sucure
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secure
 their financial sateation .
Bigest
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Biggest
companyes
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companies
,industries and headquarters are located in the Capitals and main
cities
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 which is provided
an
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with an
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 extra chance
to
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for
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 employment by moving
their
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there
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.
Overall
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is
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are
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 many
prons
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pros
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 and cons .On the hand ,
Firstly
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 ,Most
gradeuated
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graduated
graduate
people
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 seeking a
jop
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job
gets
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get
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 lucky if they are in the big
cities
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comparing
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compared
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 with the other .
Secondly
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 ,
Cities
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 will
banefatials
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benefit
 from the quality of
people
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live in
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living
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 because
the
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of the
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vabriant
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value
 of
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the Economy
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 .
Finally
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, competition will be
helpfull
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helpful
 for
companyes
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companies
 to bring the best brains from all
palce
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places
 in the
countery
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country
.
On the other hand
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 ,The
economc
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economic
economy
 will be
effected
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affected
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on
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in
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 other places and no longer
much
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be many
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oppurtinityes
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opportunities
 to
apply
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apply for
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 a job .
Secondly
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 ,
cities
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 will be more crowded with
people
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 than rural places ,
Finally
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 .Nations
lives
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living
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 in
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the counrtyside
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counrtyside
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countryside
 will not have fair chances
comparing
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compared
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 with
people
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lives
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living
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 in the
cities
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 . In conclusion ,
Gaverments
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governments
 should try to set an equal and
campteition
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competition
 for all
people
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 in the country and try to reduce the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 heading to the
cities
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 .

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coherence and cohesion
Please work on improving the structure of your paragraphs, making sure each has a clear main idea.
task achievement
Try to include more specific examples to support your arguments, as this will strengthen your points.
language use
Pay attention to spelling and grammatical errors, as they can detract from the clarity of your ideas.
task achievement
You have attempted to address both the positive and negative aspects of urban migration, which shows a balanced perspective.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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