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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You have recently visited a museum. Now write a letter to your friend about the museum you have visited. Write a letter to him/her In your letter: Where you went What do you saw there how you felt about it

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Dear Tricia, I hope you are doing Splendidly and enjoying
weather
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. I
have
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visited
to
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Australia
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last
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 month and writing
this
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 letter to tell you about my fabulous experience at the National
Museum
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 of
Australia
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 in Sydney. I,
along with
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 my family have been to
Australia
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 for a week and on the second day of the trip we visited
to
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the
Museum
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.
Initially
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, I thought it would be boring but to my surprise, I actually got fascinated by the
mind blowing
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 collection of the
museum
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. The entrance and interior walls
was
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 amazingly decorated. The
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museum
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museum's
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 stunning architecture offered me an extraordinary opportunity to explore the rich and diverse stories of
Australia
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 and
it's
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its
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 people. The
Museum
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 was divided into four parts and each has many glass cases filled with stories. The experience was stunning. I wish you had been with me there and would
recommened
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recommend
 you
to
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visit the
museum
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 whenever you get a chance or even I can
also
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 come with you to visit the
museum
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 again. Looking forward to seeing you soon and
to share
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 more exciting stories
of
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about
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 my trip, take care. Yours Truly Ashima

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Language Accuracy
Ensure that all nouns like 'weather' and 'architecture' start with a lowercase letter unless they begin a sentence. Also, remember to use 'recommend' instead of 'recommened'.
Content Development
Try to include a bit more detail about what specifically fascinated you at the museum to enhance your personal reflection.
Tone
Your letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is well-suited for writing to a friend.
Descriptive Detail
The description of the museum's architecture and its diverse stories adds a vivid touch to your letter.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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