The pie charts below shows the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

The pie charts below shows the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below shows the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.
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The pie chart gives information about the digital devices used by individuals in the ages
over
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18
until
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to
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25 years
who
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watching
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watched
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tv
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TV
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in Canada in the years 2009 and 2019.
Overall
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, the charts display six categories of devices
inculding
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including
mobile
phone
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phones
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,
laptop
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laptops
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, tables , desktop
computer
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computers
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, flat-screen
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tv
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TVs
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and conventional
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tv
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TV
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, it is
clean
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clear
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that the most popular was conventional. To
being
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begin
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with, the number of flat-screen
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tv
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tvs
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was under 10 per cent in 2009
while
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there was 27% in the year 2019.
However
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the most change
during
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apply
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was
conventional
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in conventional
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tv
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from the
percentages
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percentage
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34
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of 34
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% in 2009 to below 5 % in 2019 ,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tv with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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