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Some argue that teachers should focus on academics more than motivating students. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Umar

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 argued that
teachers
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 have to concentrate on
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 educational process
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rather than
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 inspiring
students
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.
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agrees
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 with that statement. I believe that academic
knowledge
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 is more valuable related to the
future
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 perspective of
students
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 and
teachers
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have
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 to report in front of
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government
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 . Deep
knowledge
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 of academic education gives huge quantities of opportunity. The
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 especially depends on the process and
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 the curiosity of
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students
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,quite important
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 the method
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them
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for instance
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: in 2000 the best
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 of
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university
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 of Harvard who specialised
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mention
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 that the best student is that who
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 their skills connected with
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,the
future
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 depends on the procedure of studying,who profound with accepted information and concentrate on them giving a maximum effort thereby enjoying with benefits of
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future
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the future
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. The main purpose of universities is
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 particular information to
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 during the procedure of study. Especially when
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graduates
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 the
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 thoroughly
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views
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 the quality of
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the study
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 process
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 a large amount of resources.Universities have to report in front of the
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 and explain why
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 so.
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,
between
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the
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 and university departments always
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 a corrupt system mostly between
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 and administrators
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Stanford College
was
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caught more than 10 workers
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college
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the college
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 who worked as
a directors
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a director
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,several administrators and
other
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others
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.The main thing of any educational
institutions
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institution
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 that teach young people to qualitatively
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educate
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 and make them
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the professional
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 of their choice. In conclusion,
although
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university
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the university
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 is
giving
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a
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 amazing account to
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government
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the government
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,
i
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 believe that for
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the young
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 generation
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 much better to educated by professional
teachers
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 to use their skills for the
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prospective
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future
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task achievement
Make sure to develop each idea fully before moving on. Some points in your essay could be more elaborated to deepen the argument.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs focus on a single main idea with supporting details. This will improve clarity and flow.
coherence and cohesion
Try to avoid colloquial expressions such as 'It's argued' and instead use more formal language brands since this is an academic essay. Keep the tone consistent throughout the essay.
task achievement
You provided some relevant examples to support your points.
task achievement
Your essay has a clear opinion and maintains a clear stance on the topic.
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