The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)

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The two pie charts illustrate the percentage of electronic trading for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

Overall

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while

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there was an increase in sales of video games and food and beverages in 2010, the proportion of electronics and appliances and

home

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furnishings

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decreased in 2010.

Although

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electronics and appliances and

home

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furnishings

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were responsible for the most sales in 2005 at more than a third and a quarter, respectively, they lost their market share to 30% and 15%, respectively, in 2010.

However

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after

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this

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decline,

home

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furnishings

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became the lowest contribution at less than a fifth.

On the other hand

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, food and beverage and video games,

who

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which

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were accountable for 22% and 18%, respectively, in 2005, raised their percentage to 32% and 23%, respectively, after five years.

As a result

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, food and beverage had the highest amount of sales in 2010;

moreover

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, video games surpassed

home

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furnishings

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in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words home, furnishings with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

152 words

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The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)

Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

Older people often choose to spend money on themselves (e.g. on holidays) rather than save money for their children after retirement. Is this a positive or negative development?

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