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The chart below shows the purchase levels of four meats in the UK from 1974 to 2011

The chart below shows the purchase levels of four meats in the UK from 1974 to 2011
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The line graph illustrates the amount of
beef
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,
chicken
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, lamb and pork that UK citizens bought between 1974 and 2011.
Overall
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, the purchase of all meats declined, with the exception of
chicken
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, which overtook
beef
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 to become the most commonly purchased meat. In terms of the total number of grams consumed per week,
this
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 remained more or less stable across the period. Despite starting as the most purchased meat in 1974 at just under 200g,
beef
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 sales fell dramatically to a low of around 90g, before stabilising and recovering slightly to around 110g in 2011.
In contrast
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, the amount of
chicken
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 purchased started at
this
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 level in 1974, but grew steadily over the period, overtaking sales of
beef
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 in 1997, and ending as the most consumed meat at roughly 190g, the same level as
beef
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 in 1974. As for the other two meats, they showed a similar pattern of decline.
Although
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 the number of grams of lamb purchased in 1974 was the same as
chicken
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, it underwent a consistent drop over the next 40 years, more than halving to under 50
g
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 per week.
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, despite an initial surge in sales, pork purchases
also
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 fell from the early 1980s.
However
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, the drop was very slightly less, so it finished above lamb at just over 50g.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words beef, chicken, g with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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