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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Some people think more public money should be spent on roads and motorways than the public transport system. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A majority of folks said that taxpayer money should be utilized on
roads
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 and
streets
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 rather than spending on public transportation
system
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systems
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. I completely agree with
this
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 statement and will explain my thoughts in the upcoming thread. To
starts
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 with, it is good for the development of rural communities. Public funds should be allocated to improve the quality of roadways and
streets
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 in localities
,
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apply
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 so that it will decrease the chances of accidents
occurred
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occurring
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due to
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 the lack of good
roads
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 structure.
For example
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, if the
roads
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 are made with good quality
of
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apply
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material and have correct traffic signals will help to reduce the
amount
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number
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 of incidents
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that happened
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happened
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happen
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. Another reason is that it will
helps
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help
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 the flow of rain water run without any blockage , during the rainy seasons a large portion of water
collected
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is collected
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 in the holes on the roadside
due to
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 the lack of
drainage
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a drainage
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 system that causes
number
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a number
the number
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 of diseases in that time period. Pedestrians
also
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sufferered
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suffered
 a lot
while
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 going somewhere. Proper structure of roadways and sidewalks
reduce
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reduces
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 the problem of pedestrians, cyclists and motorists.
For instance
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, if the
roads
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 and
streets
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 are designed in a well-mannered way with
right
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the right
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 drain management, individuals
no
Verb problem
do not
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 need to worry about rain or floods and related issues and diseases. In conclusion, state coffers should be allocated
on
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to
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roads
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,
streets
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 and highways rather than
on
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to
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 public transportation because spending money on
infrastructure
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the infrastructure
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 of
roads
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 ways will help to decrease the problems of public and increase their safety.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your ideas flow logically from one to the next by using more cohesive devices, such as transition words or phrases. This will help strengthen the connections between your points.
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Make sure that each paragraph directly supports your main argument and that you clearly articulate your points.
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Include more specific examples to deepen your arguments. For instance, mentioning specific types of road improvements or statistics related to accident reductions could enhance your clarity and persuasiveness.
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The essay presents a clear stance on the topic, reflecting a strong personal opinion. This clarity is essential for effective communication of your argument.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the argument, providing a context and a summary of your position.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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