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Band 4.5

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in oreder to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, many people have access to travel all over the world; in fact, travelling has become
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cheaper and
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easier than in the past. Precisely for
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, learning the
languange
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language
 of the
country
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 that
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 wants to visit or
work
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 in has become extremely important. The communication between people in
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 is not enough to understand all the meanings of the word. We
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 need to learn the culture and not only the
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 of a foreign
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.
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, we want to concentrate on the reasons why we know a new
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. In the first place,
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 of the common reasons to learn a new
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 is to travel or to
work
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 in that
country
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. Obviously, when
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 has to
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 with other people has the need to communicate in the right way without misunderstanding. Indeed, when a teacher moves to another
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 to teach their
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 they have to know and
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understand all the
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 of the children and all the
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 of the parents.
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, working in
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is not the only reason to learn a new
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,
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because
 there are other
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 that
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,
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 the cultural aspect or for love. Having an awareness of the culture of a population that
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resolves a high quantity of problems and it is a good motivation to learn a
language
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,
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love for a person
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that
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 is from a foreign state is a higher motivation, and everyone knows love
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 move a mountain. In conclusion, we have to try to learn new languages, not only for
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 and for travel
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 but
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 to get in touch with another culture.

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coherence cohesion
Work on varying your sentence structures and ensuring that your ideas flow more naturally from one to the next. This will enhance the overall coherence of your essay.
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Make sure your introduction clearly outlines the views you will discuss and the opinion you will provide. This can help set expectations for the reader.
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Incorporate more specific examples or anecdotes that illustrate your points more vividly, especially in the explanation of cultural aspects.
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You have successfully identified and discussed both viewpoints regarding the reasons for learning a foreign language.
coherence cohesion
Your essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic and presents a thoughtful conclusion.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proficiency
  • immersion
  • communication
  • cultural nuances
  • intrinsic motivations
  • cognitive benefits
  • personal enrichment
  • multicultural understanding
  • linguistic diversity
  • heritage languages
  • globalized job market
  • valuable asset
  • empirical evidence
  • tolerance
  • harmonious society
  • perspectives
  • cultural exchange
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