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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should in 20 minutes for this task.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should in 20 minutes for this task.
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 chart below compares the average statistics between women and men of five different employment status spending their free
time
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 in
hours
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 per
week
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.
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, it can be seen that people who are unemployed and retired have the highest amount of leisure
time
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, the number reaching 85
hours
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 per
week
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 compared with
full
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full-time
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time
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 employees, where the average
hours
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 number is the lowest only 45
hours
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 per
week
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. In comparison, the average man despite
the
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 employment status has more free
time
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 than the average woman working the same amount of
time
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, the difference is about 7
hours
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 per
week
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.
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, no data is shown for househusbands and employed
part
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part-time
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time
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 males
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 we have information that housewives have 50
hours
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 per
week
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 and employed
part
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part-time
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time
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 females have 40
hours
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 per
week
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 of leisure
time
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, hours, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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