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The digram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now

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The
illusrtration
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illustration
 displays a public library 20 years back as compared to what it
appers
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appears
 today.
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,
varies
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 alterations
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 taken place in which the tables and chairs that used to be the first thing you would see from the entrance
is
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 no longer there.
The
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 not
at
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 the opposite position
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where
it
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 used to be with newly constructed Self-service machines that
was
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 never installed 20 years ago.
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 to that, a freshly assembled Cafe which was once the Enquiry desk.
At the end
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 of the corridor to your right, was the Children's books
room
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 but it is now the Lecture
room
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. In terms of the CDs,videos and computer games
room
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, it faced some renovations as it is far more spacious now with sofas in each corner of the
room
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 hosting storytelling events and
this
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 is now the
Childern's
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Children's
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. The Reading
room
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 has not changed much regarding its space but
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the
 door from which you normally enter is now East
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 of South and it is now considered
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 be the Computer
room
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.

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Task Achievement
Ensure you have a clear introduction that summarizes the main changes shown in the illustration, and a conclusion that wraps up your observations succinctly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the flow of your writing by ensuring each paragraph focuses on a specific area with clear topic sentences and transitions between points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use more varied sentence structures to enhance the overall readability and engagement of your essay.
Task Achievement
You clearly identified several changes in the library layout, showing an understanding of the task requirements.
Task Achievement
You provided specific examples of changes, such as the shift from an enquiry desk to a cafe, which enhances the clarity of your response.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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