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The graph below shows the percentage of workers in different European countries with a day or more illness absence from 1991 to 2001.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of workers in different European countries with a day or more illness absence from 1991 to 2001.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares five European cities in terms of the
percentage
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 of
workers
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 who were absent
due to
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 illness over a decade, between 1991 and 2001.
Overall
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, the five cities experienced different trends in the time period.
While
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 the Netherlands had the highest
percentage
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 of
workers
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 absent, Germany consistently had the lowest proportion. As the graph shows,
workers
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 in the Netherlands started at 5% in 1991 followed by a small increase to 6% in 1992.
Then
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, it declined steadily to about 4,7%.
However
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, it rose slightly to just under 6% in 2001.
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, at the beginning employers who were absent in Sweden were 5%.
Then
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, it plunged to below 3% in 1998, but it experienced a little increase to 3,5 in 1999.By 2001, it declined to 3,1%.
By contrast
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, the proportion of
workers
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 who are absent in Sweden experienced a significant increase.From 1991 to 1993, the
percentage
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 remained steady at 3%.Afterwards, the figure shipped to 5% in 2001.When it comes to the
percentage
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 of UK
workers
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, it fluctuated between 2% and 3% throughout the period.In terms of, Germany employers had the lowest
percentage
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due to
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 it did not rise even 3%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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