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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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There is
the
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information that the diagrams below indicate on the people's
ages
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 of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and plans for 2050.
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, There are
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four pie charts which are used to create
this
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 data. Two countries have their own statistics about their society's
ages
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 which are
showed
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 in orange, blue and grey colours.
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 and foremost in Yemen there are fewer individuals over sixty years old than in other age groups.
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 information proves that young humans' proportions are superior rather than others. in 2000, infants and children were more numerous than others , but after years, it is planned that people with middle
ages
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 will take the first top from young.
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, there were many middle-aged individuals in 2000 in Italy, so it alerts that children and old
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ages
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 groups do not have domination in
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 country in
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 year.
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, predictions say that in 2050 Italy will have more old humans rather than in 2000.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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