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Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some tend to believe that
people
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 can read newspapers or
books
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 on the Internet
whereas
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 others seem to argue that
people
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 use the traditional method for reading. To a large extent, I agree
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that youngsters enjoy using their smartphones to study
books
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 and research the news in the cyber world.
However
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, there are some drawbacks to be taken into consideration to make the decision of the reading methods. The following paragraphs outline the arguments for the reading style. One of the main arguments in favour of
this
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 trend is that cyber reading is more convenient. Adults have owned at least one smartphone or table in recent years and they are easy
for reading
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online-
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online books
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books
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 in different
applications
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.
For instance
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, they download online
library
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libraries
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 from
google
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 stores and sign up
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 account.
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, they are
membership
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 of those
applications
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 and read
books
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 which are provided by those
applications
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 anywhere and anytime.
Moreover
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, most
applications
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 are free for the public.
This
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 leads young
people
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 to read online
instead
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 of reading printed
books
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. In fact, I tend to support reading in the digital world
due to
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 the convenience and no fare.
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, to a
shorter
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 extent, it may not be the best opinion among elders depending on reading on the Internet. It is experienced that printed newspapers or
books
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 can highlight or mark down
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important information directly. Elderly
people
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 like to use traditional methods to record their interesting things on
papers
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paper
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by
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with
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 pens rather than using
e-pen
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e-pens
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 to write on
tablet
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.
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, even though members are able to read, they may pay
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extra fees
for upgrading
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to upgrade
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 their level of membership.
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, the cost of online
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 may be higher than the cost of traditional
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. In
this
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 case, I tend to believe that printed
books
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 or newspapers are a good choice only if their cost is lower than online. In conclusion, it
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 true that online
library
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libraries
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 will
continues
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 to be a popular phenomenon among adolescents and children on the grounds that the convenience and the price of e-
books
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,
the
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 seriousness of recording by pens in the real world should not be overlooked. To fully maximize the potential trend of those disadvantages, sons and daughters have to
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accompany
with
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their parents to use the high-cutting items to replace the original ways.

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task achievement
The introduction could be clearer in stating your main argument. Try to include a concise thesis statement that summarizes your position on the issue.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly. This helps the reader follow your argument more easily.
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Provide more detailed examples to support your points, especially in the main body paragraphs. This will strengthen your argument and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the subject.
task achievement
You have addressed the task and presented both sides of the argument, which shows critical thinking about the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps in organizing your ideas.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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