The line graph below shows the average monthly temperature in Beijing,London,New York, and Sydney in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperature in Beijing,London,New York, and Sydney in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph below shows the average monthly temperature in Beijing,London,New York, and Sydney in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the average monthly
temperature
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in four different cities
such
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as Beijing, London, New York and Sydney from January to September 2020.
Overall
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, it is evident that
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Beijing and New York had the higher average monthly
temperature
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,
while
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Sydney showed least to higher variations.
To begin
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with, in Beijing, the average monthly weather gradually increased to just above 20% by April,
However
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, between June to September the proportion of monthly
temperature
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steadily decreased to just above 15%.
Also
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, New York showed relatively equal changes.
Firstly
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, the average monthly
temperature
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was around 3% which marginally surged to 25%.
Secondly
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, it remained unstable from July to August. From August, the proportion of average monthly weather went down to 15%. In Sydney, from mid-January to June, the percentage of average monthly
temperature
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fell to just below 5%,
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from July to August, it quickly rose to around 17% ,
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in London, the proportion of average monthly
temperature
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had suddenly increased from February to August and the percentage was 20.
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, it dips down to 15% by September.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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