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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The chart shows us how the
population
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in
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 four Asian living in
cities
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 changed over
50year
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a 50year
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 period with predictions for
next
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the next
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 two decades. Looking
overall
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 structure it is readily apparent that, in three countriesnamely Malaysia Thailand and
Indonesiathe
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Indonesia
 percentage of
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population
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the population
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 living in
cities
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 increased with the exception of
Philippines
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the Philippines
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. In
preliminary
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the preliminary
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 period
Indonesia
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Indonesia's
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 lowest .
Starting
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 number of individuals living in
cities
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 was 13%. 5 decades the
population
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and
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in 2020 was 50%. The second lowest indicator was in Thailand. The
population
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 increased in
first
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 decades. Starting shows stability. In the close to same. shows sharply increasing during the period
while
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 starting decreased. Predictions about the
population
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 in
cities
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mentioned
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 from 2030 to 2040 only . The chart that urbanization will rise and
cities
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 will be more in all mentioned countries.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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