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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The chart shows us how the
population
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 in four Asian living
incities
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in cities
 changed over
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a 50year
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50year
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50-year
 period with predictions for
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the nexttwo
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nexttwo
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next two
 decades. Looking
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overall
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 structure it is readily apparent that, in
threecountriesnamely
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three countries namely
 Malaysia Thailand and Indonesiathepercentage of
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population
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the population
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 living in
cities
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 increased with
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the exception
 of
Philippines
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the Philippines
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. In
preliminary
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the preliminary
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 period Indonesialowest .
Starting
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The starting
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 number of individuals living in
cities
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 was 13%. 5 decades the
population
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and
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apply
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in 2020 was 50%. The
secondlowest
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second lowest
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 indicator was in Thailand. The
population
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 increased
infirst
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in first
 decades. Starting shows stability. In the close to same. shows sharply increasing during the period
while
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startingdecreased
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starting decreased
. Predictions about the
population
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 in
cities
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 mentioned from2030 to 2040 only . The chart that urbanization will rise and
cities
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 will be more in all mentioned countries.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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