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In most of the countries, people prefer to live in a rented apartment rather than buying a home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in rented accommodation?

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Nowadays, society would like to live in a
rent
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 apartment
instead
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 of buying
theirs
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their
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 own
home
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of
this
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 situation. There
several
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are several
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 benefits of living in a rented
house
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,
firstly
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 you could move on to another
house
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 whenever you want. It
wont
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 take a lot of your time.
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a
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young influencers can travel around the world and
creating
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theirs
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their
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career
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 without thinking about
home
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.It means that they can change
the
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apply
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house
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houses
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 easily and save some money, renters
are do
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 not have to pay
for
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property taxes.
On the other hand
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, there are
also
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 some drawbacks. One major
disadvantages
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 is that renters have to pay for living in a rented accommodation every month, and do
not
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did not build any property,
for
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instance
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instance,
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 imagine a grown person
have
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 lived for one year at
the
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a
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 rented apartment, and
at the end
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 of the rent, they do not have any of place where they can just
came
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 and feel kind of feelings that they are at
home
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.Another problem is that you have a lot of responsibilities
of
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for
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 the appliances
that
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apply
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at the
rent
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rental
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home
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, if you have
broke
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broken
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 something, you must
to
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pay for it, and pay not only for the value of
thing
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a thing
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,
in
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for
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 general fine for breaking.
At
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the
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a
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result
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result,
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 you have just pay for living at
the
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apply
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home
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, where you cannot
felt
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feel
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 like you
at
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the your own
home
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, and people may feel insecure about their future In conclusion, if people have a job that
not
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is not
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 stable about place, the rented
accommodtion
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accommodation
really
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is really
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 flexible and easy to move, renting a
house
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 offers flexibility and fewer responsibilities, but it
also
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 has risks like lack of ownership. In my opinion, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages, especially for young and mobile people.

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coherence and cohesion
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Strengthen your conclusion by summarizing the main points and stating your opinion more clearly.
task achievement
You have presented a clear stance that renting has both advantages and disadvantages, which is essential for the task.
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The essay includes examples that illustrate your points, making the argument more relatable.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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